Let me know what you think!
https://vimeo.com/739767582 00:30 Removed Callie reference to not knowing her dad - repetitive.
00:50 Cut the first scene after the "quite a lot of debt" line as "sentimental value" is the same joke.
00:51 Tried to craft humor in the edit using Callie's reaction shot as a punchline.
00:52 Cut to the deleted scene footage. I think this works pretty seamlessly, implies a time skip and some small talk having taken place between Callie & Janine.
01:01 Cut short Janine reminiscing over the coin as it's slow and has no context at this point in the movie. Not perfect but spliced in a shot of Phoebe and Trevor watching her take the coin like they're suspicious and don't trust this person.
01:14 Removed Janine and Callie's exchange about burning the place down because it doesn't add anything and makes Callie seem whiny. This is a jarring cut but the scene flows better as a result.
01:25 Cut Callie's dialogue because she was saying too much and "Hello Dad" leads into the awkward exchange with Phoebe which I have excised completely. A shame as Janine's dialogue about fairies is nice bit of character detail, but there's no way for it to make sense without including Phoebe's barbed comments, which don't serve her character.
01:38 I really wanted to cut the dialogue around "I never met the man" but with this footage it's just better leaving as is.
01:42 Added reaction shot from Callie digesting the "Is it ever too late?" line from Janine as foreshadowing and to suggest vulnerability.
01:44 if more Callie reaction footage was available I'd end the scene on Callie and jump straight into "Baby It's You" and the next sequence.
(original scene:
https://twitter.com/MI_Ghostbusters/sta ... BoEpYtxVxA)