- December 12th, 2021, 5:42 pm#4963407
Spoilers ahead if you haven't seen Afterlife yet.
I loved Afterlife, it had its issues but overall I enjoyed it a lot. One part that I did feel was a little flat was the entrance of the original Ghostbusters scene. I've only seen the movie once a few days ago but ever since I've been playing around with different thoughts about how that scene could have gone in terms of dialogue. I'm clearly not a screenwriter and I'm not saying the below version is any better its just different and to be honest it was quite fun sitting down and writing it so wanted to share.
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Gozer is clearly winning the battle and starts to walk over to Lucky who is on the ground. Gozer appears to be preparing to make ‘the final blow’ against Lucky. The camera stays on Gozer as she approaches Lucky when we suddenly hear off-camera:
VENKMAN
“I just love what you’ve done with your hair.”
Gozer, distracted by the comment looks to her side. The camera pans to the original Ghostbusters who emerge.
VENKMAN
“The style is a bit too 80’s for me but how have you maintained such a vibrant colour after all these years? Clairol Nice and Easy? Just for Men?”
Gozers face appears angrier.
STANTZ
“Oh I think she remembers you Pete.”
VENKMAN
“Probably best if you don’t say, or think, too much this time Ray. Do you want to take it this time Winston?”
ZEDDEMORE
“I can’t figure out why she always looks like she’s just stepped out of a bubble bath?”
STANTZ
“Maybe she is trying to clean up how much of a filthy eldritch entity she is”.
Gozer gets angrier and growls at Ray.
VENKMAN
“What did I just say Ray. Look she isn’t all bad, she clearly can’t roll her eyes at our jokes.”
Gozer starts to move her hands forward to strike at the original Ghostbusters.
ZEDDEMORE
“I don’t think she is into chit-chat fellas….shall we? For Egon.”
STANTZ AND VENKMAN
“For Egon.”
The original Ghostbusters fire their Proton Packs at Gozer, capturing her in 3 streams. Gozer untangles the streams and throws the original Ghostbusters against the ECHO-1. The original Ghostbusters remain on the ground in pain.
ZEDDEMORE
“I think someone has been hitting the gym. You feeling old now Pete?”
VENKMAN
“I don’t feel old…I don’t feel anything. How you doing Ray?”
STANTZ
“I think I need to stop drinking.”
VENKMAN
“Gozie, kitten. Surely if you’re mad at anyone it’s your toy boy Shandor, out of all the places to build an interdimensional portal, he choses Summerville, Oklahoma. Not exactly downtown Manhattan is it?”
GOZER
“Time for you to join your friend”.
VENKMAN
“Just hold on one minute... I’m trying to imagine you with a personality but its taking me longer than expected.”
ZEDDEMORE
*Rolls eyes and shakes head* - “There is no way we are making it out of here alive.”
Phoebe fires her Proton pack at Gozer, movie continues as per normal.
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I loved Afterlife, it had its issues but overall I enjoyed it a lot. One part that I did feel was a little flat was the entrance of the original Ghostbusters scene. I've only seen the movie once a few days ago but ever since I've been playing around with different thoughts about how that scene could have gone in terms of dialogue. I'm clearly not a screenwriter and I'm not saying the below version is any better its just different and to be honest it was quite fun sitting down and writing it so wanted to share.
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Gozer is clearly winning the battle and starts to walk over to Lucky who is on the ground. Gozer appears to be preparing to make ‘the final blow’ against Lucky. The camera stays on Gozer as she approaches Lucky when we suddenly hear off-camera:
VENKMAN
“I just love what you’ve done with your hair.”
Gozer, distracted by the comment looks to her side. The camera pans to the original Ghostbusters who emerge.
VENKMAN
“The style is a bit too 80’s for me but how have you maintained such a vibrant colour after all these years? Clairol Nice and Easy? Just for Men?”
Gozers face appears angrier.
STANTZ
“Oh I think she remembers you Pete.”
VENKMAN
“Probably best if you don’t say, or think, too much this time Ray. Do you want to take it this time Winston?”
ZEDDEMORE
“I can’t figure out why she always looks like she’s just stepped out of a bubble bath?”
STANTZ
“Maybe she is trying to clean up how much of a filthy eldritch entity she is”.
Gozer gets angrier and growls at Ray.
VENKMAN
“What did I just say Ray. Look she isn’t all bad, she clearly can’t roll her eyes at our jokes.”
Gozer starts to move her hands forward to strike at the original Ghostbusters.
ZEDDEMORE
“I don’t think she is into chit-chat fellas….shall we? For Egon.”
STANTZ AND VENKMAN
“For Egon.”
The original Ghostbusters fire their Proton Packs at Gozer, capturing her in 3 streams. Gozer untangles the streams and throws the original Ghostbusters against the ECHO-1. The original Ghostbusters remain on the ground in pain.
ZEDDEMORE
“I think someone has been hitting the gym. You feeling old now Pete?”
VENKMAN
“I don’t feel old…I don’t feel anything. How you doing Ray?”
STANTZ
“I think I need to stop drinking.”
VENKMAN
“Gozie, kitten. Surely if you’re mad at anyone it’s your toy boy Shandor, out of all the places to build an interdimensional portal, he choses Summerville, Oklahoma. Not exactly downtown Manhattan is it?”
GOZER
“Time for you to join your friend”.
VENKMAN
“Just hold on one minute... I’m trying to imagine you with a personality but its taking me longer than expected.”
ZEDDEMORE
*Rolls eyes and shakes head* - “There is no way we are making it out of here alive.”
Phoebe fires her Proton pack at Gozer, movie continues as per normal.
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